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JudgeBergan

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Poems...
« on: July 17, 2008, 04:38:28 PM »
As you might have known, I did some poetry on Eruyt Village before, so I'll post it here too. :D

This is from Vaan:

I'm a wannabe Sky Pirate...
I could sore through the air.
Just maybe... one day,
I'd be lucky to dare.

So, I stole the treasure.
I even got away!
But then I ended up...
In the Garamsythe Waterway.

If I would die in here,
Where would I go?
Could it be the Farplane,
Or could it be the water's flow.

I've gotten out!
But have I really?
Cause after this,
It's even more dreary!

« Last Edit: July 17, 2008, 04:45:51 PM by JudgeBergan »

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Re: Poems...
« Reply #1 on: July 17, 2008, 04:40:16 PM »
As you might have known, I did some poetry on Eruyt Village before, so I'll post it here too.  :D

This is for Vaan:

I'm a wannabe Sky Pirate...
I could sore through the air.
Just maybe... one day,
I'd be lucky to dare.

So, I stole the treasure.
I even got away!
But then I ended up...
In the Garamsythe Waterway.

If I would die in here,
Where would I go?
Could it be the Farplane,
Or could it be the water's flow.

I've gotten out!
But have I really?
Cause after this,
It's even more dreary!

Bolded part. The second two lines are sort "meh", but the rest is quite well written. Good job.

« Last Edit: July 17, 2008, 04:44:32 PM by Neku »

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Re: Poems...
« Reply #2 on: July 17, 2008, 05:30:29 PM »
awesome job cant wait for the next one ;)



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Re: Poems...
« Reply #3 on: July 28, 2008, 02:28:14 PM »
Made this one my self ;D ;D :

May New year Like Math.
Friends Adding
Enemys Subtracting
Sadnessess dividing

Hapiness Multiplying
and a
Happy 2008

« Last Edit: July 28, 2008, 08:26:47 PM by Ashelia10 »

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Re: Poems...
« Reply #4 on: July 28, 2008, 05:52:26 PM »
Made this one my self ;D ;D :

May New year Like Math.
Friends Adding
Enemys Subtracting
Sadnessess Deviding

Hapiness Multiplying
and a
Happy 2008

bolded part is spelled dividing
awesome job on the poem though ;)



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Re: Poems...
« Reply #5 on: August 02, 2008, 06:09:28 AM »
this a hi-ku

My heart aches with pain
When I see you, I vomit
Die, away from me


cookie to whoever gets where this is from!